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Shadows in the Fire 2008-04-02 ch 1,	abuseWow, I loved this. It doesn't, to me, seem like I would--I get irritated when there are no capitals. But this was amazingly beautiful. (also, I love your profile. It seems like it would have taken forever, but it's so original!) -Shadow
Blissfully Sarcastic 2008-04-01 ch 1,	abuseThe whole thing was kind of...mediocre. Not that YOU'RE mediocre, I usually lovelovelovelove your writing, but this isn't your best work. It was a little confusing to figure out which person was which, and--after portraying the mother as a complete monster in the boy's eyes--she winds up being a completely sweet lady who is just confused. Maybe you should start further back in time, so you can give more background on the relationship between the three of them? The wording was far too simple for the piece. Or at least the way you put the words in the sentence. It's a melodramatic story, so you should use dramatic words. Do you know what I mean? The plot is fine, it's just...I'd like to know more about it.
Faith Adeline 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abusegreat piece, very strong. i really enjoyed reading it. you have a way with words :) Faith
Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseWow. Amazing! Great job, although a little confusing with the two she's, but the italics definitely help and i can see why you want to keep it "anonymous." I have a character in one of my stories, and this reminds me so much of him. Great job! You captured the feeling perfectly. Keep it up! =) --Katrina Zeffirelli
lookin4nemo 2008-03-28 ch 1,	abuseOMG SO AWASOME ur detail and description is out of tis world amazing amzing amzing (oops i am a bad speller) keep it up! kudos

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