 Taltush/MeiMei 2008-03-28 . chapter 1A small bland poem that would be nice if it were, you know, correct. Unfortunately, this was uploaded prematurely. Notice, for example, "Waiting trough". That seems like it means "waiting through". An "h" is missing. Similarly, "all treathening". "Threatening", perhaps? Another mistake found three times is "it's" and inappropriate apostrophes. "Waiting through its false dreams", "its all", "its cold halls". The mood this poem sets is very nice and I like the imagery, but this is no way to publish. Please correct all mistakes and only then publish. |