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| simpleplan13 2008-04-03 ch 1,  | abuseI like the last line, but I got confused because you made it seem like their home should be their heart, but then you say your heart... other than that I liked it a lot. It made a really interesting point and the desctiptions, especially in the first stanza, were great |
| Aquafied 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseoh my dear lord do i ever remember you and yes, hah, my writing style has changed quite a bit and well, you have been gone for a good while. - this is absolutely beautiful but in that startingly simple way i wish i had so much hope for things. |
| generically beautiful 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseYou know, those first two lines are surprisingly deep. |
| electric feel 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abusei know someone like this |
| Manuel Fajar 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abuseThere's an echo of Emily Dickinson's 'Eden is that old fashioned home we dwell in every day,...' that haunts 'Homeless'. How few think that a heart is home enough. It's the tragedy of human life,-- the frailty of man's search for permanence in walls that crumble long before love. Sorry, not exceedingly happy thoughts, but then happiness is an internal and individual flower. Isn't it? m. |
| Tytherpol 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abusei like it it's not amazing or anything and it gets kind of cliche at parts but it's kind of cool and i think you have the ability to write well |
| A Free Elf 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abuseOf course you can be homeless if you've never had a home. You still don't have one, so you're home-/less/. |