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| karyen 2008-03-28 ch 1,  | abuseI've always loved vampire stories and this one seems to be headed in a good direction. Only one thing I noticed was that occasionally you repeated yourself in a sentance, like: "except colored in a bright red color." and a few other instances. It's not improper grammar, just a pet peeve because you don't have to repeat yourself just to be understood. Anyways, I'd love to read more of the story. Kudos! |