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| Sairalinde Inwe 2008-03-28 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting... I like the way you left the reader hanging in some of the sentences. It was a little confusing at first though...it took me a couple of lines to figure out that there were two points of view. Very descriptive though, nice use of your adjectives. But I have to ask...how were they both able to balance on the flagpole at the same time? Anyway,well done ^_^ you had my heart going till the end! ~Saira |