Oh wow, this was good! I mean, really good! Very new, I like it!

hell, that was emotional. I CRIED and im NOT the kind of person who CRIES when i read books. That is SCARY for me. Anyway, i didn't catch a single error in this entire composition, except for "You always WAS a naughty girl." but im guessing it was meant to be that way, right?

this is extremely sad.

i was almost crying...which is very unusual when i'm reading.

yours until the wind changes,

gg

Very emotional.

The narration was flawless; you managed to bring the characters to life in a small amount of writing. I actually began to care about their troubles.

Excellently done.