Wow.

All I can say is that I loved it, I wish it weren't so short, and I really want you to write more soon!

Hey!

Good first chapter to your story, and here are a few things I noticed.

-Dialog: Nonexistent, you only introduce one character, which is understandably, but I hope you include some talking in the next chapter. Otherwise it's sort of dull to read.

-Flow: You used her name once, and the rest of the time you used 'she' therefore I think that word is really overused in this chapter.

-Grammar/Spelling: Nothing really blared out at me, so good job with that.

-Enjoyment: This was a very basic chapter, with not really much going on, but I enjoyed it nonetheless.

Good Work!

-Kaiyako K.

This is a great beginning. Your whole world concept is pretty fascinating, and I like how you started off slow and not explaining the whole thing right off the bat. It's good to take it slow and just let it unravel. Good job, looking forward to more!

xoxo, The Astronaut

Have you ever read The Tower of Ravens or any book from that series? It's a little funny because in that book it's basically the same thing, except I think she was born without a horn and was therefore made an outcast.

I'm not sure, though, since I never actually finished it. =P

Will you continue this?

I loved that!!
Usually I don't read stories or things the length of one, but I liked your summary...so it was a must. I like your detail of looks and emotion-like you can see everything...keep writing!