Hmm... Most people would say that you would need every “i” capitalized and the first word of every line (of every stanza) would need to be capitalized, but I honestly like the effect it makes for this certain piece. No one could do this exact thing you've done and have gotten away with it. I saw whispers and such because of the way you've done this, and I could feel the emotion. No one's ever been able to get me to see and feel exactly like this before.

~Rébecca