Reviews for Alone without Embrace

crysintherain 2008-03-29 ch 1,	abuseI really liked this. Except its almost "too" much like A Child Called "It". I read the book when I was in like 6th grade but I do remember the nurse and not being able to eat and everything and the garage. I don't know if your life is really like that but it just seems all too much like the book. I can read that again if I wanted to read your story basically. Not trying to boo you or nothing just saying. I'm going to keep reading though. Wow this is the longest review I've ever wrote. Weirdness.
nighthawks.lullaby 2008-03-29 ch 1,	abuseWell written, and very sorrowful great work. I hope things work out for this eleven year old girl, maybe the nurse will adopt her or something?
Tranquil Thorns 2008-03-29 ch 1,	abuseI've read that book. It's extremely sad, and I see some similarities between it and your own story. I hope yours isn't based off true events, though? I thought this was a good start. I noticed a few errors - 'principle' should be 'principal' - but this gives a good look into the girl's life. The ending confused me a little, though. Did she eventually tell the nurse about sleeping on the floor, even though she was so reluctant to say anything before? I thought that paragraph seemed a little rushed. Also, I would space this out better. Maybe you can separate the nurse's dialogue into a different paragraph? Overall, nice job!