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| theREvamped 2008-03-29 ch 1,  | abuseDifferent...this one was a little harder to follow. Very deep and very moving. Definitely not a light read. The jumping between the two brothers was a little confusing but albeit necessary for a more dramatic effect. I could never really say anything bad about this...hehe, I have a weak spot for sailors. However, it seems that Bezu's story was much more developed than Jean's. Bezu had the story while Jean had the perspective. |