Reviews for Rewrite For Her - FictionPress.com

S. M. Saves 2008-08-03 ch 2,	abuseNice action scene. The only problem I had was with the first paragraph. It's not clearly stated. I think you forgot a few words, was it suppose to be: "The plane ride was nice, it was a three hour ride, the take off and landing was a bit (rough but) there wasn't much turbulence."
S. M. Saves 2008-08-03 ch 1,	abuseDecent start. I didn't think the "forward" served much purpose and actually preferred the first line of Chapter 1 "I was in one of my teenage fits" instead (to start off the story). It's a nice set up of characters though. If the title of the story is "For Her" then take out the "rewrite" and just put in it the summary. Otherwise it looks like you're "rewrit(ing) for her".
Punksheep 2008-04-03 ch 1,	abusewell, it was okay. good grammar and whatnot but i thought it was a bit boring. there was nothing to really pull in the reader. the only thing that really did pull you in were the last couple of lines. i would suggest combining this chapter with your second chapter(assuming theres more action in that one.) or else, people may not bother to take a 2nd look. I however, will be watching for the next chapter lol :P However, i think the reader gets a good sense of...family togetherness :3 i think it was a believable look into the closeness and quarrels of a family.