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| lilliephoenix 2008-08-20 ch 8, anon. | abuselol! i really like the last two lines of this fic. you're pretty good at writing porn too, failte. and not fangirl/boi porn, but the realistic, awkward stuff. i liked ryan's character development, too. |
| Tig 2008-08-18 ch 2, anon. | abuse... guh wow |
| Bluorange 2008-07-29 ch 8, | abuseYAY! Cute ending! but... I want a damn threesome scene! >_< *murders you* |
| Bluorange 2008-07-29 ch 6, | abuseOh God... I'm getting WAY more turned on by this then I should be... hehe |
| Bluorange 2008-07-29 ch 5, | abuseHoly shit! I can't wait for the sex scene! YAY FOR SLASH! It really is so much more entertaining than straight romance. It's so weird... Ok, good. You elaborated on the sister. |
| Bluorange 2008-07-29 ch 4, | abuseHoly crap! You're sex scenes are making my face all hot! And that doesn't usually happen for me! I love you're style! Maybe it's because I know this is written by a man and not some horny fangirl. Haha! No offense to horny fangirls! They write good slash! It's just their sex scenes always seem unrealistic. It's a little bizarre, hehe. I think you need to write more about how the sister feels about this. She seems rather oblivious to the fact that her brother is now coming onto another man. But I like Ellen's character! |
| Bluorange 2008-07-29 ch 3, | abuseOh my EFFING GOD! That was so awesome! Yay for man-sex! WOO! Oh, sorry for forgetting to sign my name, hehe! And YAY! Old people like the internet too! WOO! But you're not OLD, just older. I say you're old until you're not. Woo, I've always had a thing for interracial love! Blue (Awesome sexy gay ninja) |
| Bluorange 2008-07-28 ch 2, | abuseOH! That was hot! Majorly hot! i like this story! It's peaceful, for some odd reason... |
| Bluorange 2008-07-28 ch 1, | abuseGood story! It's very bizarre, but I'm interested! I wonder how intimate this is going to get? |
| Liviania 2008-07-18 ch 8, | abuseI don't even know why I started this story but it turned ou very well. Kind of a dark topic . . . but you threw in interesting things about culture, race, maturity that made it about more than just sex between a grown man and a teenager. After all, good writing can make anything work. Livi |
| daemon_9 2008-06-24 ch 8, anon. | abusei love this, i really love the way you ended it. it makes me want more. |
| mad-one123 2008-06-16 ch 1, | abuseshi-t. i think i must be racist. i cant see seem to carry on reading cos the relationship is with a black man. omg im racist. sniff. i think. :( |
| Roman C Lee 2008-06-16 ch 8, | abuseOMFG! OMFG! I LOVE YOUR STORY! Omg, ah, I can't say that enough! lol! I Had SO MUCH FUN reading this! Haha, wow, this story is just fucking awesome!! Just unbeleivably great, lol. I started reading this in computers, lol. I'm taking summerschool, and it seriously blows, and what I normally do is just read hot fanfiction the whole time, lol, to keep myself from fucking eating my hands off. Ha, so I started reading it, and omg, I got so into it! Haha, this guy was leaning over my shoulder the whole time, and I was kinda nervous about him maybe freaking out on me or something, but omg, he got into it too I think, lol! So after a block period of reading your story, I sent the link to myself when class ended, fucking RAN HOME and then continued reading, and now here I am, totally paraising you beyond beleif, lol. YOU ARE AWEOME, YOUR STORY IS AWESOME, lol. I'm just amazed. It was hot AND meaningful AND had a satisfying ending, lol. It sucks when authors leave it off on an almost cliffhanger; that kinda drives me nuts until I forget I ever read the story. Dude, I just don't really know how to say how much like--well, really love--your story, but I think you get it: I like it a lot. lol, I'm so glad I surf for sexy fanfiction durring computers, lol, I didn't think I would find something as freakin amazing as this. Ha, I hope to read more of your stuff soon! Thanks for writing this! |
| gossipgalmishi 2008-06-16 ch 8, | abuseO.o Really original characters and ending ;), ~claps~ |
| BWeep 2008-06-12 ch 8, anon. | abuseomygosh. It's so beautiful at times that readers can forget that there's any sex involved at all, and Ryan 'matures' so seamlessly that it's realistic. His POV grows from a childish, scared one to a narrative of a person who is knowledgeable and in control...and I can't figure out when it changed! Hmm...we never did get to find out Sno's name. |