lol, I know what you mean about not understanding your own poems.

Kudos for using "destitute" as a noun.

Should that be "a substitute"?

Interesting. Good word choice to make a short, compact poem.

I love that song! And why didn't you tell me it was your birthday?! Happy belated birthday! Hope it was great.

Anyways, on to the review.

I like the poem but the destitute bit sounded a bit awkward. maybe instead of "a destitute", just destitute would sound better. Or maybe you meant a destitute as in a destitute person (noun)?

I listened to the song, which is really good btw, and yeah, I think I understand. It makes a lot of sense, with just a few words... I like it. It makes me all melancholic, and for some reason I can't be bothered to analyze, I thrive on melancholy. Most of the time anyway, 'cause sometimes, too much is just too much.

Anyway, back to the topic at hand (we both know I tend to get distracted easily), this was very good. I'm addicted to the way you write, inspiration comes to you without warning and you give us little pieces of gold that make us think and feel... thank you!^^

I haven't heard the song, but perhaps I should listen and see if that encapsulates the meaning for me. I know the feeling related in the poem.

However, wasn't sure about the part "a destitute" - it didn't really make sense to me as destitute is an adjective but it felt you used it like a noun. I could be making no sense here but anyway.

I really liked this and felt it was quite poignant in a way.


Yay for you writing more :p love you !!