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| XxXKristie marieXxX 2008-05-12 ch 1,  | abuseGood Question Great poem! XKristie MarieX |
| Arcane D. 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abuseTragic, and I think that this has to be the most striking, as well as effective piece I've read by you so far. I think the title should be changed to something a bit more fitting, and though parts of the lines were somewhat unoriginal, there were others that simply stood out. Overall, the substance is there and so is the message. thank you for the read. arcane |
| simpleplan13 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseSat seems wrong... I feel like it should be sitting I like this though, especially the middle stanza with the radio. It's pretty easy to relate to and I like the question at the end. Nice piece |
| charisma1525 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this... Isn't it weird how sometimes when you turn on the radio it's like each song is speaking to you in some way? But my favorite lines were "It's too much effort to turn the light on/too much to put my mask on" and "Why did we never believe what we were told?" Those spoke to me the most. Goof job. |
| fatbird33 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abusei rather enjoyed this. it flowed very nicely |
| kloun mannequin 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseI love the first verse, this should be longer, maybe a song coz the flow is cool. |