|Reviews for Of Girls and Guitar Hero|
| christinaxxyo 12/22/08 . chapter 11
It's amazing how you made everything go so fast yet the chemistry between Clara and Joel so strong. Awesome job :)
| christinaxxyo 12/20/08 . chapter 1
I've got to say that even though it was really short, it was entertaining and amusing. It's so simple and silly that I adored it :) Awesome job
| anthropomorphichybrid 12/4/08 . chapter 11
Hmm, that was the first fiction press story i've read ... it was funny! Loved CLara's character (kinda sounds like one of my friends) ... and Tessa's a real bitch but the story overall was very amusing.
| Written 12/4/08 . chapter 12
GOOD LUCK DQ!
| GrannyP 12/4/08 . chapter 12
I LU.U.U.U.U.U.U.U. you so much! Okay, that was a big creepy, wasn't it? Sorry for the creepy factor! But really, you are great!
| atollo 11/10/08 . chapter 11
okay, this story is amazing. I laughed out loud so many times. not to mention it was cute. Clara's so funny with her rambling.
| fairy Eva 10/28/08 . chapter 11
AW! That's really all I have to say. I loved reading this story, it was just the right amount of fluff and funniness to complete my day. Thanks for the super duper read!
| dragonflydreamer 10/25/08 . chapter 11
I haven't reviewed this yet? Well, that can be fixed easily . . .
I ADORE this chapter! It's such a perfect conclusion to this story that I can't even put words to it. I rarely read stories all the way through on this site, but I must say that I enjoyed every bit of yours.
[“Thanks,” she says, “for bringing me home twice this weekend.] This bugged me a bit because the dialogue tag was inserted in a a weird place. They usually go after a natural hesitation in a sentence.
Favorite scene/character? Why must you make me choose D:
Haha. Well, I think my favorite character would have to be Tessa. She's so realistic and . . . I don't know, /raw./ She's very relatable. I also love Frank. He adds a perfect amount of humor.
I'm sure that if I went through the whole story I could give oyu a variety of favorite scenes, but for now I'll say that I really loved the sceme where he broke up with Morgan. Both stayed very true to their characters while still progressing the plot.
Well, I thnk I've said enough. I do hope that you decide to write a sequel to this; I'd LOVE to read it :D
| raineyday 10/25/08 . chapter 4
Oh my God, I missed this story so much!
This was hilarious, as always. Your dialogue never fails to impress. It's just so natural and funny. It has perfect flow. I really love it. And Morgan is just freaking hilarious. She gets some awesome lines.
One little nitpicky thing: "She’s okay and I’m over Tessa." Comma after 'okay.' *nod*
Oh! And a superb ending in this chapter. "She's a slut. *conks out*" is the best way to end anything, I feel. So hilarious. I love this story, and I'd really forgotten how much I did. I'll definitely be reading more soon. _
| vinny2 10/23/08 . chapter 1
I have not been this exited for a story with so short of a beginning than this one. Yes, this intro is rather short, but I really do like it becuase it gets straight to the point without sacrificing good characterization.
We have Joel-or Joely as he prefers not to be called. He's happy (or at least comfortable) with the way he is. He's recently broken up with his girlfriend Tessa, and now he's perceived as lonely. Maybe he is, but he's cool with that.
Frank. Well, he's just that guy who thinks that one can't be enjoying life if he's doing it with himself (Self-love only goes so far...). Thanks for the warning on the potty-mouth, by the way.
So, Frank takes his for a night on the town to free him of the distress he doesn't really have. Joel didn't really fight back against Franks' suggestion, so maybe he's not as comfortable as he claims? Future chapters should enlighten this pint further.
So far, I'm liking where this is going. It hasn't gone anywhere yet, but it's defentantly going somewhere and I like where it's going. (Part of me doesn't even understand what I'm trying to say, and the other p[art of me is trying to silence the cynic.)
I will be reading more of this. The dialog is a bit bland and straightforward, but the plot is intriguing.
| FirstBloom13 10/19/08 . chapter 5
Heya! This is a review marathon review. RM roxs my socks, so you sould check it out (link at bottom of profile)
Your characters are so relatable. Even though it is quite a scenario, you don't feel like it's out of the blue unrealistic, and you characters help with that. they act and speak like real college students.
One thing I didn't like about this chap was the fact your sentences are very long, and sometimes are hard to take in. I suffer the same problem, so don't think you're alone. making them shorter would make it a lot easier to soak everything in, whether it be humour, an important plot point, or dialogue. Just try and use a mix of sentance lengths.
good job! _
| belle1220 9/28/08 . chapter 11
I don't typically review completed stories, but I really enjoyed this. I think you're a girl (and if you're not I apologize), but you write the male point of view very well. I loved Frank. He was such a fun character. He should get together with Morgan if you do a sequel. Clara and Joel are just completely adorable together. They balance each other out well.
Besides liking the story, I basically just wanted to be your 100th review!
| No Longer An Account 9/27/08 . chapter 2
It's only the second chapter, but already I feel like a want to review.
You've really got something here. The characters act just like real people, which is something I value extremely. With a little revision, this would definately be good enough to publish.
The dialogue is also crazy-awesome. For example:
“Joel, if you are over Tessa, then I am an Egyptian pharaoh. Which I am not.”
That made me laugh. And I really, really needed a good laugh. Thanks.
| criti-sized 9/24/08 . chapter 3
Lol, another very entertaining chapter. This one showed a side of Joel tha admits he wants to get over Tessa, but Frank's idea of it isn't working out any.
And Morgan, A new and excitedly drunk new person. She sadly reminds me of those girls that are shown in the movies that get extremely drunk and do something stupid, but it's funny.
There were a few typos in this chapter, but not really noticeable.
| criti-sized 9/24/08 . chapter 2
Another good chapter. Frank is amusing, and poor Joel's attitude of boredom is funny. I especially laughed at the part where Frank spread the map out on the table and got it wet, then to justify his accident claimed that they weren' going in that direction, lol.
He's a character in a character.
Somehow I was expecting Tessa to show up in the story somewhere, but not so soon, lol. She comes off like the type of girl that broke up with him to play the field and has had her fun, and now wants to get back with him.
I could always be wrong.