writing a story about a writer? I bet you could be more creative than that.

Oh, I love it. I can't wait to read about when they are in Wales.

Hi! I think you pm requested a review ages ago, but honestly I have a completely awful memory. Sorry I didn't write this two weeks ago. Anyway, on to business.

This isn't too bad. The plot's really original, and you have a reasonable scenario for their involvement. It's not as completely farfetched as a lot of FP story setups, which is excellent.

Now, on to being critical: You want to be careful not to move too quickly. It sort of felt like you were cramming a lot into this chapter, and it makes it hard to absorb properly, while at the same time making it difficult to make the characters multi-dimensional.

Also, watch paragraphs like this: "Lacey had gotten home at six and she rushed to get a shower. She blow dried her hair while simultaneously sorting through her clothes for something to wear. She picked out a white v neck shirt that wasn’t cut too low and a pair of black slacks that hugged her hips. She slid on her undergarments and her pants. She grabbed a brush and swept her hair into a messy but smooth half ponytail and pulled on her shirt. She had just slid into some flats when the apartment intercom buzzed. She ran over to it and pressed intercom." Basically, all but one of those sentences started with "She." It's a good idea to mix it up more -- if, in fact, you feel the need to describe every step of her getting dressed.

I would recommend using more commas, since you seem to have some run-on sentences. Not as many as some, but it does make the pace of the story a little hectic. Slow down and give readers a chance to get to know the characters on their own terms.

I don't make it a practice to go through and copy-edit an entire story for spelling and grammar in a review, because that's a job for a beta and I think it's more important to learn to look critically at one's own work. I only noticed a couple of word misuse errors that I wanted to point out: "There" in "Oh there Victoria, the painter, and Jack, the lawyer." It should be "They're," which is a conjunction of "They are," and there should technically be a comma after "Oh" to offset it from the rest of the sentence. Also, "heroin" is a drug. A female protagonist is a "heroine" -- a common mistake, but it makes a huge difference to the sentence! There might be more, but I was doing a fast read-through.

Wow, that's long, and it sounds hypercritical, which was not my intention. I want to stress that I think you have a really good plot and there's a lot of potential in this story, which I would love to see fulfilled. Keep writing!

Wow, what a great job. Go in for an internship and you get to co-write with a famous author, while living overseas. Can't get much better than that! :)

Ohh I loved this first chapter. I am really excited about seeing what happens in Brecon.
Keep up the good work and I cannot wait for chapter two.