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| Jevanminx 2008-09-10 ch 19,  | abuseHahahahaha, that pocket thing was great, and those girls were funny too. JM |
| TwoClovedHooves 2008-09-08 ch 19, | abuseHeart-crushing is painful. |
| JustAnotherLibroLover 2008-09-08 ch 19, | abuseAH! don't end it there! can't wait for the next chapter! i hearts this story! |
| Izzey 2008-09-08 ch 19, | abuseawesome chapter. it's so obvious that it's gonna be Chelsea that gets her heart broken, Ryan so likes Liz. please update again soon |
| Searching Crystal 2008-09-07 ch 19, | abuseLoved it! Post more soon! |
| kimbadewey 2008-07-30 ch 18, | abuseGreat story! I love the characters. My only criticism is that I find Whole Foods crackers to be delicious. |
| Jevanminx 2008-07-29 ch 18, | abuseChelsea cool, and I love Daisy too, my family got used to random bouts of laughter coming from my room now, hehehehe. JM |
| JustAnotherLibroLover 2008-07-29 ch 18, | abuseHee Hee, nice! I just started to read this tonight (well last night I suppose seeing as it is 1:38 AM, but whatever) and wanted to tell you I lobes it! Great story, with only a few minor errors, but its hard to care when your cracking up because a poor young girl was told her goldfish went to Hawaii, only to see his poor unseeing eye floating in the toilet bowl and find out he was flushed. Hee Hee, LQTM (If you don't get that look up Demetri Martin, the comedian. I would try to explain it to you but I often find myself amazed at the ways I can butcher random jokes to the point where people just stand their with their mouths hanging open, eyes glazed over, probably thinking, "What is wrong with this poor demented child?") Anyway, back to the story, I love it and can't wait 'till your next update! |
| xbluxmoonx 2008-07-29 ch 18, | abuseah no evil- how cud you end it there!??! i went to click the "next" button and there was nothing! xD anyway, awesome chapter. i can't wait for the next so hope you update soon! now, to go put bandaids over my eyes...lata... |
| xbluxmoonx 2008-07-29 ch 16, | abusethis is going pretty well, but it's dawdling over to unrealistic. first of all, if she's a tiny girl, she'd be drunk by the end of drink numero uno. and if she drank SIX! she'd have a major throwing up fit to avoid alcohol poisoning- if it isn't too late after drinking so much. unless the cups were like itty bitty, but it wasn't specified- AND she filled it to the brim, didn't she? also, if she wants to keep the fact that she went to a party a secret, she'd try and avoid her parents and take a quick shower to get the smell of alcohol and smoke and all that junk off of her. sorta common sense. unless ur building up to something i'm not sure. lol. will keep reading tho. |
| futureauthor852 2008-07-28 ch 5, | abuseOk...so i haven't finished reading it yet..im only on chap 5 but so far so good. kepp writing! |
| Izzey 2008-07-28 ch 18, | abuseawesome chapter. so, who's this Miranda chick? anyways, awesome chapter and please update again soon |
| xbluxmoonx 2008-07-28 ch 1, | abuseheehee that was a great chapter. i like her sarcastic attitude. sounds like me xD. and yay for johnny depp! and yes, that is VERY hard to pull off. he must be very very good looking lol xD |
| The bunny always dies first 2008-07-28 ch 18, | abuse*Shaking head* Chelsea's a dumb **. Ryan's adorable. Daisy's adorable. Lizzy ...needs a life, and thank-god she has that therapist. |
| songlawyer 2008-07-28 ch 18, | abuseI very much like this story so far. It has the innocence, such as Liz and Daisy, but then there's the realities of some teenagers like the guy who felt her up after the party. It's very believable and that's the main thing you want to bring to the story. I admire your writing technique and I think you have great style. Awesome job! |