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Lady Fingers
2008-04-28
ch 1,
abuseomg i love this so much
i said that out loud just now during class
as the kids beside me tapped quietly with their own thoughts drowning mine
and i re read each line just to make sure i was reading it right
and how i wish i could have a conversation with someone like this one
and how it reminds me souly of wolf and how our conversations were vaugley similar
and how when i said: "Oh my god i love this."
no one made a sound.
fairytale failure
2008-04-10
ch 1,
abuseThe repetition of love to/love you works really well, especially the single last line that is not in conversation (although at first when I read it, it sounded like you meant you would love to stop.) I could picture voices reading out your conversation; they sounded like things people who are really comfortable with each other would say.
peewee potato
2008-03-30
ch 1,
abuseI love this.
Ahh.
losing gracie girl
2008-03-30
ch 1,
abusecute.
nice job.

yours until the wind changes,
gg
the big crunch
2008-03-30
ch 1,
abuseit was so sweet and i was smiling the whole time.
haha, it was a great piece.
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