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| astral boy 2008-04-01 ch 1,  | abuseHehe, wanderlust indeed. Well I should say, some parts of this seemed a bit forced, such as the "socket" line. But it's sort of one of those simple, heartfelt pieces so I think it gets away with it. It makes a nice song, not just because of the repeated verses and rhymes, although they help with the inside-the-head reading, but because of the simplicity. They're just my thoughts. So, ah, well done! And thanks so much for your review. |