I love this start.. its intriguing.. and keeps looking for more.. what comes next opne wonders? how didi they meet? why her? why him? oh so many options flowing thru..

i ccan tell im going to really like this story. soo far its really good. update soon!

i wasn't trying to tell you what to do with your story because it should be authors choice but you asked thats all and thanks for repling to mine most authors don't seam too ;)

Wonderful! I love the style and the mystery of why exactly Lucian has kiddnapped her. Can't wait to find out more, please update soon.

i really, really like this story. it's intersting so far and i like the charecters. i like how she doesn't sound like some scared little girl, i like how she actually sounds intelligent. update soon please!

The way you write has a different tone to it then most people who post their stories and it's quite the refresher!
Just a couple things to be fixed though:
1. When you do dialogue and you describe how they say it at the end you should be putting a comma at the end of their dialogue. If that doesn't make sense here's an example, ""I would rather die than be like you," she spat."
2. "His eyes flashed"- with what? I know I can assume it's anger but you should probably just put that in there to elaborate for the people who don't assume. ^^
Good update and I can't wait until you post another!

It's an interesting start, a bit on the short side, but it's a prologue, and I've seen some that are mere sentences long.

I look forward to your continuation.

I like it. Your writing sounds professional... in that creative spontaneous sort of way. >< lol
Anyways, I like it. A bit confusing, but if that was what you were going for then so be it. It wasn't too confusing though and I got a general feel for the characters and there was enough information that makes me what to learn more. So kudos to you!
Hope you keep posting, I'd love to read more. :)

hey i like it so far but make the chapters longer