Reviews for Sky of Faded Smoke

Reviews For: Sky of Faded Smoke

fatbird33 2008-04-01 ch 1,	abusei wold criticize something, but i can't gind anything to criticize
electric feel 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abuseall the smoke analogies worked well this is sad, and it's good that you can write so poetically about it
SEMMU 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abuseYou're wise for your age. I've read your bio; I'm happy to know someone your age knows enough to know how little you know. Do you know what I mean? Anyways, since your a spudding scholar, here's where I'd like your writing to progress (take it or leave it). I fear covert cowards have rule over us. We're all they have to fear. How weird that wound wand masters are the only ones powerful enough to heal. Ironic- how man and beast work as one, in sync; Are the givers madmen, narrators of normalcy? Do the holocaust fumes of History's chimney , consumed by our lungs, make us one with the burnt? Does powerlessness predetermine our rationalizations. Do we share a determined destiny; do we share guilt? Or does innocence spring from our ignorance? Can we rewrite reality, as if nothing happened? I'm afraid not. We're forever wandering in the sky... breathing... air from faded smoke. (I tried not to take away from your message, and a good message it is. You can claim this as your own or throw it out, completely your decision.) Here's a few notes: Try to eliminate as many words as possible. Keep a dictionary by your side. Give yourself time to develop. Do not limit yourself in the beginning; you can always place restrictions on your writing as you mature. Read, read, and read some more! I've just began writing myself. We're on this road together; yet, I feel (considering your age) that you've taken a running head start. I'm sure that you're going to be great. When the day comes that you're a rare master of the pen, be sure to visit my bio and share your wisdom.

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