I love the last part of this, where the narrator is speaking. There are some gorgeous lines/ideas in there: "for you and your violet flame./I regret adding your fragile name/to the list of those I could love someday." Those are my favorites. Really heartbreakingly beautiful. Keep writing! :)

I really like the tone of this. It just fits a religious/spiritual piece. I'm not sure what else to say. Just really liked the feel of it. Keep writing! :)