Eh I'm not in a paragraph reviewing type of mood. The idea was very original though. A bit depressing/dark too.

Wow, that's intense, but really well written. Great Job and I hope things start going better for you.

Sadie

Deep. Nice...good ending. Love the ending. Where did you get this idea from, its so creative!

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CHANTEL!

OMG That rocked my rainbow stripy socks!
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You rock chicka

~Rach

that was intense