you have a beautiful way with words. very impressive

Beautiful write. I love the last stanza, it's so real and true.

I would love opinions from a writer like you on my work, it would mean a lot to me.

Your diction and descriptions are amazing.

I love this x 5.98 x 10^24 kg (approximately the mass of the earth).

-This is what I would say if I were a closet physics nerd, which I'm not, only a poet preoccupied with a mountain of problems for said class.

Instant favorite. Probably the best expression I've ever read of what it means to be a poet. "Words chalky-dry with flatness" is a phrase I'm tempted to tattoo to my right hand for inspiration in times of writer's block. The imagery of ghostly shadows of syllables and letters is reminiscent of struggling with a piece, looking back at your old works and wondering how you'll ever turn out anything half as good again.

You're wrong on a crucial point, you know. I've read quite a sampling of your poems...and yes, there are still pending reviews. But your work is so much beyond beautiful that I'd need to invent another adjective to classify it.

You are, by far, one of the best authors I've encountered on fictionpress.

Interesting piece...the descriptions are beautiful, in a brutal sort of way. It all seems so hopeless in the beginning, and at the end, there's that subtle innocence, 'sleeping/dreaming/for something more'. I really liked it.

I loved it! sometimes i feel fake when i write, like it is all a mask. U rock at relating 2 how i feel!!

amazing, as always. i can relate, that feeling of knowing your writing /something/ but it's all crap (which your piece, i must say, are not!).

rowan.

I like this a lot... the descriptions are beautiful in the first stanza and the ending was really interesting.

One line though "as something true, as something real.".. I don't think the second as is really needed, but that's just me

Really great piece as always.

I loved the way you ended this!
And 'I'm floating thoughtless beyond the stars' was just such a simple but beautiful image. Keep up the good work!

-Silence

I love the separation of beautiful from the first line because it can be read in another way. The poem has that feeling of false deepness or thoughtfulness to it. I find the poem to be a pleasant read.


-C.N

konnichi wa

This'll be short since I've got to go study, but I just wanted to tell you that I loved this piece. My favorite part especially was that first line -- where you separated "beautiful" from the first part because it can be read either way. :)

Ha det
-Shan-

amen to that. nicely written ;)

I love the last paragraph.It's really cool.Epecially the last line.

Oh yeah...shouldn't you captalized the first letters of each sentence and your i should be I?

I like your choice of adjectives."Chalky-dry","the little ghosts of syllables and letters".Really nice.

This works well- great actually. I love where you ended the lines; very strategic, I think. Wasn't too sure, at first, about you ending with "of" and "and" those two lines, though, but then again... the next lines wouldn't have as much impact if those words had been pushed onto them. So yeah, nice job.

It gives me this false sense of a deeper meaning, but the content of it leaves me grasping for a side to hang on to; leaves me wondering, "Well, is this real or not?"

Was an interesting experience. Thank you.

i like the first paragraph ;)