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| DemonBunny205 2008-04-01 ch 1,  | abuseVery confudeling. But it's really good. |
| Scottish Princess 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseI like this one, too, I just don't quite understand how the last two lines go together. You say: "Writing, typing, posting up, translations, of my feelings I must." I think it might be better if you changed it to something like this: "Writing, tpying, posting up, translations, of my feelings." But, again, I like it. The honest simplicity of it all. No elaborate words, but you still get your emotions and your point across. Well done. |