Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search Login Register Extras
Reviews For: Little Black Bird

simpleplan13
2008-04-04
ch 1,
abuseAnd it was an inevitable happening that... an inevitable happening, just sounded really awkward to me

I like the whole devil thing and also the transition from blackbird to black boy was really nice (though I dont think you need the underling I think the piece draws enough attention to it.

I also like the whole idea of telling them that their suffering isnt that bad because of others. Ppl say that so often and it so ridiculous.
painted.music
2008-04-01
ch 1,
abusekonban wa

Hm, I would think of this more under slavery than the Holocaust, based on that last stanza: "hush, little black BOY, hush." My other review for Uncivil War applies to this as well: stunning and beautiful and powerful... and I wish I could take the credit for writing such a stunning piece. :D Wow! You've amazed me twice in one day... twice in FIVE MINUTES! That takes talent. :)

My favorite line(s) is/are: "The devil doesn't have a rhythm... Knows no sympathy" "There is no escaping your crowded cage" -- and then the whole last stanza.

Ha det
-Shan-
fatbird33
2008-04-01
ch 1,
abuseoo i REALLY like it. it was insanely well done. huzzahs for you!
Return to Top