 pinna 2008-10-06 . chapter 1This is brilliant - so haunting, and beautifully written. If I were you, I would try to get it published, in a magazine or something. |
 TheKatsPajamas 2008-04-11 . chapter 1Oh, how terribly cryptic.
I love it.
=]
chek it,
JRG |
 Naomi Schemer 2008-04-06 . chapter 1Welcome back, you've been missed. Naturally you have to come back on a somber note, huh? It's an interesting psychological situation you described here. I don't feel much sympathy towards the narrator, to tell the truth...I don't think I'm meant to. Anyway, I hope this isn't going to be another 3 month wait for the next story, although I can be patient. I wouldn't want you to overwork yourself, now would I? |
 Faith Adeline 2008-04-02 . chapter 1wow, good job. very strong, solid piece. Keep it up :)
Faith |
 Duzen Broken DreamZ 2008-04-02 . chapter 1this was slightly confusing but I loved it all the same.
sorta something poetic about it too. and full of imagery.
creative indeed. |
 firestar267 2008-04-02 . chapter 1I really liked this, it was so touching and very well written. The last line had a great impact on the whole thing. |
 Cinera 2008-04-02 . chapter 1That's one of the most amazing things I've ever read. I'm sad that it's only a one-shot, because you could do a lot with it. Great job. |