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The Prettiest Banana 2009-10-15 . chapter 1
I love the imagery, very beautiful.
Narq 2009-10-04 . chapter 1
I like!

The three stanza poem tell a story, and that's really good - your poem's not a string of pretty words, it really does mean something.

Perhaps you didn't need "untained and untouched" I mean, chaste and pure kinda said it all.

How about swapping the lines "they steal away" and "concealed by the light of the stars" that might back the last stanza flow a bit better??

Narq.
CassandraRose526 2009-09-01 . chapter 1
This is a really beautiful poem. I love the imagery it evokes. I love the backwards lines, such as chaste were her hands; pure were her lips . . . dark was her lover; bold was his heart. The idea of them running away together is lovely. Although I hope his darkness does not taint her pureness. ^_^ Simply splendid!

Cassandra
Isca 2008-07-05 . chapter 1
Excellent light/dark imagery.
sTrive 2008-04-06 . chapter 1
that was a good poem. short but good.
Faith Adeline 2008-04-02 . chapter 1
I like this. Very solid, good piece. good job.
Faith
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