interesting. a little cliche.

it seems most of your poetry is striving for something thats not quite in it, yet. i don't know why i think that. but it's the feeling i get from reading your work.

i think if you keep working you can get something really good.

This is really good. You think there will be a kind-of-sortta happy ending but there's not. The spelling out crash was neat. and I liked the first stanza the best. your writting is really expressive its kooll. keep up the good work.

This is my fav of your work so far. I'm insanely Jelous of the people on here. And i thought my work was okay...Mine pales in comparrison..

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I can realy connect with this too..

heh like the crash bit, very well done. Quite a bit of drama too ;)