I like the way you put the words together.

Your poems have very good structures. Quite an original way of writing but it works very well.

it's nice to break small rules that don't really matter,


pretty.

So much sadness in so little words. I love the choice of vocabulary.

what bothers me is that I can almost imagine what you were trying to say. oh my heavy heart!

I always adore your work, and I'm sure you already know that, haha.

I think this one holds a strong essence -- it's short but holds a lot of movement and intensity. Great job.

What does '032508' turn into? Is it reflective of Roman Numerals (as they can have meanings)? Interesting.

the word of 'too late' comes into place in this work of yours...
condolence...

nice...

The first line to me anyway was 6 syllables... I love the last line... it's unique and really beautiful personification. The rain of melancholy though... I dunno the whole rain and sadness thing is a bit overused, plus melancholy is kinda an overused word too... kinda like you picked it for the syllables.

Anyhow I really like it... the first line being separate like that was really great and as I said I loved the last line

I love how you managed to get so much emotion and imagery into only two short lines. I've always loved Haikus, even know I do not know how to write them.

Wow--I love how you sort of said everything with nothing, Chidori Nadare! This is only (*counts*) eleven words but they hold so much meaning and, surprisingly, imagery. I think it would have been interesting if you'd continued the poem but the shortness takes nothing away.

-Shadow

I like the mysterious quality of the metaphors. nice.

(although the first line does have six syllables.)