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| wordsworth in a garbage can 2008-04-05 ch 1,  | abusethis is gorgeous. the first paragraph is genius. "like a plateful of food in your face and you've forgotten how to eat." every line is a keeper. |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abuseyour 2nd stanza is great I love the phrase about jeweled future. |
| lost for words 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abuseI like how you end with a continuation of the metaphor you started with. "melting in the dinner pot for fate" --interesting idea there. |