Hello again. I hope you think I'm being constructive. If you find this review first, please read the other before reading what follows. It'll make sense. If not, forgive me.

This poem has a little better feel. The rhymes seem less forced; however, there's still a few lines that are forced, throwing your readers off and disrupting your flow.

For example: 1st- AABB 2nd- AABB 3rd-AABC 4th-AABB
5-AABB

Also, the word "tree" is the most forced word of all. It simply doesn't belong.

You can share the same message in a mor beautiful way (my opinion only) by not rhyming.

I'll use the last 1st stanza:

Man's soul is beaten
down, will crushed
into the ground.
Man's spirit is broken,
leaving all hollow and
bereft.

-(I'm not sure I'd use "bereft" word. It doesn't fit with your others. You want to maintain a consistant language level. If you use old English, use all old English, if writing simply, use all simple words, if your attempting to impress scholars, use words that averages joes (like me) will have to look up. Yet, I do like the consonance it provides with the repeating 'B' sound.)

Compare the two stanzas and I think you'll find little is changed and the flow seems more natural. Or, if you wish, continue rhyming. Remember, I'm just offering a friendly suggestion. Best of luck. Write on!