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| simpleplan13 2008-04-04 ch 1,  | abuseThe first two lines I didn't really like at all... they sounded weird and I wasn't sure how they fit it, but I loved the whole knife thing. the death won't knock on your door.. you don't need the the maybe I love you more than I do... how can you love someone more than you love them?? That confused me The whole sofa/pillow thing was really great. Nice piece... you had some really unique images in there... well done. |
| Jae-Kyeong 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI love the last two lines. I know exactly how that feels. |
| East-0f-Eden 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abusei thought it really portrayed how people long for each other. good job. |