In the second stanza you have a lot of punctuation and in the last one you have some, but the first, third and the last to some extent could use more punctuation.

Other than that I like this piece a lot. I especially loved the third stanza with the food descriptions, that was awesome. I also like how you italicizing the last stanza. But my favorite part was "our future perfect tense" that was really interesting.

I love this, the description that you used and the tone of the whole poem. Wonderfully written.

keep it up.