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| StaryNight 2008-04-08 ch 1,  | abuseIt was too dirty for my taste. Animal dung came to mind when I read this as well. |
| Julius Gillian 2008-04-03 ch 1, | abuseYou do know that seven, five, seven (I caught that as soon as I saw the structure) is a haiku right? The first line was blunt in its premise, then you conclude by saying we gradually ease ourselves into each others lives by taking pleasure in our 'faking it'. It's one way to look at things. I don't really like one sided poetry though, especially when there's obvious examples of the contrary out there. This haiku seemed very dirty anyway, like animal dung and it was just barbaric to my eyes. Maybe that's what you intended. Haikus are too easy to write in my opinion... Take care, - Julian |