Reviews for and you say, i can never fake a smile

Reviews For: and you say, i can never fake a smile

persephone in waiting 2008-06-30 ch 1,	abuseThis poem leaves me speechless, except to say that I love the fluidity of it, and the raw emotion that emanates through your words. It's wonderful...
glimpses from an ivory towe... 2008-04-27 ch 1,	abuse"your face across the table looks like heartbreak seasoned with pretending" This struck me as the most evocative line in the entire piece (and there were plenty of them). Perhaps because it's an expression I've seen but could never quite describe. God, this is a wonderful poem. The imagery rings true for the circumstances. I've the strangest deja vu of recognizing myself, once again, in one of your pieces. You phrase everything so beautifully, it's difficult to pick a favorite line. But I love the ending stanza too: "and you say, i can never fake a smile not for you you'll always see through to just how poorly i feign at the concept of i'm okay;" Rhythm and transcendence and truth out of tragedy. What a gift.
Lauren Ikon 2008-04-25 ch 1,	abusei like it, but it doesn't invoke in me what i imagine is intended. possible reasons for this are: i'm not sensitive enough, and my heart is too worn out OR your simple words combined with basic emotion are washing each other out.
TheNarglesWillEatYou 2008-04-24 ch 1,	abusewow, that's really good. really deep. are you a professional writer come to infiltrate our happy little internet community? what organization are you with?
This Modern Love 2008-04-23 ch 1,	abuseyou make my breath hitch and my heart drop into my ribcage.
-helpsmethroughtheday- 2008-04-15 ch 1,	abusei cant even think of the right words to say. all that comes to mind is OH.my.god.you're.amazingly.talented.and.i.really.wish.i.had.half.the.takent.you.do:) gabe
harrypotterstarz 2008-04-09 ch 1,	abuseit was sad, but very, very good! Keep it ^!
siphoned afterglow 2008-04-09 ch 1,	abusewhat i love about your poetry is that i can always relate to it in some way or the other, its intensity always catches in me and make me think of a million sad things when i read your poetry. song or not, its wonderful ;)
Renata Ora 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseThe words in parentheses are a good echo and reinforcement to the meaning that is being expressed within the poem--almost song-like! "bracelets of scars" was probably my favorite phrase in the entire poem--I'm presuming that the speaker cuts herself, but you've expressed it in such a way that sounds a lot more symbolic. I really like how last part: "a storm front (ligting thunder & golf-ball sized hail". It's also paired in the same stanza as "make-believe girl". I'm not so sure if this is the meaning that you meant to express, but I feel as if the speaker wants to return to the good old days of childhood. (Children may not identify the term "storm front", but rather with your description of lightning. Nice job :) I really wonder where you got your inspiration from.
the face in the window 2008-04-05 ch 1,	abusei have to agree with your other reviewers - this really does sound like this could be a song. there's a very distinct beat, it seems, to this piece and it's beautiful. "twirl, jump, spin across the room, headphones/ on my ears & bracelets of scars around my wrists oh anything" - love those lines. nice job. i'm adding this to my favourites. rowan.
Take the Money and Run 2008-04-05 ch 1,	abuseThis poem is very touching, and really sad. I do agree with other reviewers that it sounds a bit like a song but thats fine, and some poetry has this sing-song feel to it. I would work on the punctuation, though, and capitilization, especially capitilizing the i's.
Xu.xDripdrop 2008-04-05 ch 1,	abuseHm... this poem flows more like a song. (There really is a difference in song poems and normal poems, or at least to me) I like it, but again, I felt it seemed more like song lyrics. At first I thought it lacked organization, but then I realized it probably is intentional, but it was still a bit awkward. Again, might want to change the genre into song. Also, proofread! Capitalize your "I".
Sexy vampirechick 2008-04-04 ch 1,	abuseWow!This is so heartbreaking...I don't even know what to say. It's very well written.Your description of the situation was wonderful.
Faith Adeline 2008-04-03 ch 1,	abuseAmazing piece. very heartfelt and real. I enjoyed reading it :) keep up the good work. Faith
girls will be boys 2008-04-03 ch 1,	abuseoh darling, this is heartwrenching, i adore it and i wish i could say something to comfort you but i can't, because i don't know how, i never did. this sounds so much like a song, and is this about your mother, or just your family in whole or or or ?

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