GAH! I go to your profile for the poll, and for some reason followed you here, and GAH!! I should've known something like this was hiding away somewhere!

Anyways. :)

You can't offend me with your 'mindless moron' comment since I don't drive, but I have a feeling I'll be the same kind of driver as Kris when I do. It's kind of a scary thought. I love this Mike character; the whole situation reminds me of my friend Courtney and I except that we're both striaght and I don't think I'm in love with her... That bed sounds good right about now (and I didn't mean it like that - seriously).

If you ever feel like continuing this story .. do it. :)

Of course that's all up to you, I just personally really liked it and I don't read hetero much. Ok, that was a complete lie.

I NEVER read hetero but I figured that I could try at least one and I actually like it. :) So.. yep!

I'm gonna put it on alert just in case one day you feel like updating it. Just in case.

This style is definitely a lot different - more introverted - than your usual action-oriented style, but you made it work really well. The inherent humor really shines in the places you want to, and you didn't make the first-person POV sound omniscient. At the same time, Kris's voice tells enough about the surroundings so that we actually have a pretty solid grip on what's going on.

Mike and Kris /definitely/ sound human enough, haha! I really love the way they interact with each other in this. I'm looking forward to finding out more about them and what's going on! :)

I'm super excited for this story! Its style differs from your fanfics, but I like it. It's a lot more up-beat, but still real. It sounds to me like it really is a girl (18? 19?) telling us her story. It's natural in a contemporary sense, different from what you usual feed us, your readers, with but still catchy. And the "ker-ash" line, oh man, that got me hooked! Talk about an effective cliffhanger. : D

I'll eventually get my own account here, or figure out how translates over - until then, the old fashioned way. XD

Thank you for sending the link! :D I've been itching to read some of your original work.

Okay, so I'm not really good at the constructive criticism thing, but I'll try. I tend to lack tact, somehow, so I hold back and... I'll shut up. DX

First and foremost (too late for that), congratulations! I'm not sure how you did it, but it's 2:30 in the morning and I /feel/ like it should be eight, nine, even ten hours from now on a /very/ frosty winter day, complete with piles and piles of snow, strange new places to venture by a cold car, old friends to see again. It may not seem like a big achievement, but it took me the whole of five minutes and a side google-search that revealed nothing to figure out what you meant by "plowed" streets. :P If I hadn't just gone out to remedy my depleted pretzel supply and restlessness, I'd have to go out again just to make sure that it was rain spotting the streets and not snowdrifts.

It still strikes me how much /spirit/ Kris has. I keep coming back to it, and I'm really enjoying learning the different facets of her character as you made her. She's got spunk, sarcasm (my favorite), and a saucy no-nonsense attitude: basically, she's a blast. :P I love what you do with your characters, always, that they have /so/ many levels apparent in quirks and concessions and little almost-contradictions that don't necessarily make sense until later, but have the benefit of making them /very/ real.

And always, always, plot and character development in wonderful, teasing lilting rhythm. They dance, and I don't know how you make them do it, but I'm dead jealous. XD I hope, oh I hope you decide to continue this into a second chapter. I'd love to see what happens next. :D And to see Mike a little less groggy. XD

Hey there,

A story by you is so enjoyable to read. It's nice to get out of fanfic mode and read something original by you. This is definitely a change in your style. I'm so used to reading about people who have no feelings that reading about someone's genuine feelings is a nice change.

There is a lot of solid character development in this chapter. I find myself wanting to know more about what's going to happen...especially with your "Ker-ash" ending.

I've always had a preference for reading (and writing) third person though. I feel like there is a lot of limitations from first person POV. But then again I do love that you put those day to day details about Chinese food, waking up, being cold, etc. I think those things add a nice touch of realism and might be better done with first person. I love how you put emotions into physical terms. You always do that so well.

Your writing is awesome and I don't want to sound like I'm criticizing when I say this (because I am but a peon), but when comparing it to your other things (like perhaps your first chapter of “Waiting”), it's lacking that descriptive quality that is your signature. I mean, it's awesome, but it doesn't go into a lot of details the way that you usually do. Maybe the details are more personality based from the first person POV? Does that make sense? Maybe the details are more based on real objects instead of metaphorical? I don't know. It's different. I do prefer your other style (gotta be honest), but this is still top tier (Hell, this is better than most novels I read).

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Fuchannini

the show. the big problem? god this is one of those annoying cliffhangers that aren't *that* suspenseful but suspenseful enough to drive me up the wall

quite amusing so far and i like the nice flow from dialogue to just ... thoughts/ commentary.

just wondering... because the beginning had the whole "x Kris x"... is it safe to assume that you're going to alternate point of views? or am i completely overthinking things?

and oh my freaking god. i actually understand the title of this. learned it just last semester haha

very interesting so far so definitely continue :]

Hey! Where's the rest? Here I am grinning like an idiot and then the chapter ends! I don't really appreciate that too much. *sigh* Anyway, if you can't tell... I'm really enjoying this. There's enough descriptions and dialogue that it's easy to follow and fun to read... more please?

I swear to you,this is one of the best stories I've read on the site. I was thoroughly engrossed in reading it, and I loved the little side comments spread throughout it. PLEASE write more, because I'm kinda sitting here dying to know what happens next! =]