Thanks for the review of my poem!

I really enjoyed the flow of this piece, it was handled nicely, and lent itself greatly to the story.

And again, amazing! I think I just became your biggest fan! Haha!
~SomethingNifty

Not bad. :) I did enjoy it, especially the lines:

"she feels in beating in there

her chest cage guarding it so delicately

it makes her sick

this sensitive thing

that kills her

and ironically

keeps her alive."

I think the line could possibly work better without the "ironically" there and let the irony speak for itself without pointing it out. Either way, though, this was really well written. Slight typo at the end ("mroe" = "more", but that's obviously just a typing error, no big deal) but other than that, this was good. Keep writing!

- Lady Glass