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| Reviews for The Shoe Malfunction |
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   AranaBanana 4/11/12 . chapter 5Hello there, That was such a sweet short story. I really enjoyed reading it. Though I felt that the Fairy Mother part wasn't really needed. Anyway, thank you for sharing this story with us. |
| Rosedreamer101 8/14/11 . chapter 5 haha that was adorable ! :) |
| E.H.Taylor 6/14/11 . chapter 5 That was absolutely adorable! I loved it and I think you should write many more fairy tales like this :) |
| Jem the writer 4/2/09 . chapter 5 Aw, this story was super sweet! I loved the whole idea behind it! ] Good job - looking forward to reading more of your works! JEM |
| Hoodfabulous 7/3/08 . chapter 2 Nice, update. |
| Kicon 4/20/08 . chapter 5 Stinkin' awesome story! I love it love it love it! Kicon |
| Kicon 4/18/08 . chapter 4 Oh! She stole his HEART! He loves her! Awesome story! Kicon |
| kingdomfantasyanime453 4/13/08 . chapter 3 very cute...and funny... i love your twist on things... UPDATE! |
| Kicon 4/13/08 . chapter 3 Oh, a twist! I love this story. It's really cool. Update soon! Kicon |
| A Gypsy's Charm 4/13/08 . chapter 2 aww cute :p Casphus is in luv ;3 please update soon this storeh is adorable hehe |
| Kicon 4/8/08 . chapter 2 Man, that was an AWESOME chapter! I love it, absolutely love it. Kicon |
| Lost Fairytale 4/8/08 . chapter 2 I adore this story its so cute and amazing! I can't wait to find out what happens next ) |
| A Gypsy's Charm 4/4/08 . chapter 1 heheh sounds fun :p please update soon |
| Kicon 4/4/08 . chapter 1 Wow, this is an awesome story idea! I really like it! Kicon |
| Akhdar 4/4/08 . chapter 1 I'm liking this so far, you've set up a story that has a classical fairy tale feel to it, but also put a bit of a twist in it to make it different. Good job on your descriptions, it makes it really easy to see what's going on and what is around the people. Most writers give a person's description all in one paragraph, but here, you scattered them around a bit, which is better in my opinion. Something to watch out for is the cliche. I know that this is a term that is shunned by all and thrown around far too often, but it's still there. Example: By leaving the mother's heritage unknown, I automatically guess that she's royalty or nobility. If there are no additional twists and the cliche comes true, then I'm left feeling like the story has let me down. Either build up our expectations for one thing then make it turn out to be false, or find a way to twist the cliche into something new. Good job. I'm looking forward to seeing how this progresses. |
