I really like it, but the interruptions of the explanations is a little confusing.

AHA! Cross Hatch Tower re-make! XD And we start with the scene where Ken's sick and what-not. Nice, very nice. X3

Character-based stories happen to be a specialty of mine but plot is not just through sending them on a quest, it can also be through their pasts and secrets they hide. My story called Sacrifice is somewhat an example of that.

I really liked this story so far. You have great characters which make me want to read more of this work and long chapters which are always a plus in my book because a couple of paragraphs is not enough to get you into a story at all.

I'll defintiely be back for another chapter.

If you wish or have the time, feel free to check out some of my works. You may like them.