Oh wow, this is probably my favourite thing of yours that I've read, this is awesome. A little cheeky at the end as well :) but not full-on, you know? Love it, great job!

at the partying crowds, crowded corner.. the crowds, crowded just sounded off to me

I like this... you lead the reader to believe its your girl and you want to be with each other and then you totally change it at the end. The descriptions of the party are nice as well.

wow, it scared me a bit but I like the mistery around this.