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| simpleplan13 2008-04-04 ch 1,  | abuseDon't expect me to reappear J/ust because your heart is burning... I think fp screwed up the format there I like this... the chorus part is really nice, especially the last line of it. I really love the repetition of Don't expect too. The only thing is you end each stanza with a period, but they're not sentences. Some of those are multiple sentences... so I might work on the punctuation, but other than that nicely done. |