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| caitlinfool 2008-04-26 ch 1,  | abuseoh i realy hope this isn't just a oneshot! i love it!! and if it isnt, i think the boys point of view would be way cool! |
| Pinkamoo 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abuseA bit morbid, but good use of adjectives none the less. The she's and he's that are perfect for you just always have someone else they like. How very disappointing it is. |
| cyanidecandy 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abuseaaww .. touching. it's one of those stories where u feel so sorry for the persona as he seems so perfect for his love , noticing little details about her etc. great work !! |
| Slurpy 2008-04-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow. I can't describe how much that spoke to me. Reminds me so much of what I've felt in the past, I can totally relate. (Even though you'd need to switch the pronouns :D) The story's very forward and uses meaningful words to get the point across, keep up the good work! |
| MidnightSolstice 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abusePoor guy, but he is kinda a stalker lol |
| Moon's Poetess 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseI like it. I like how you describe the boy's thoughts almost obsessively but at the same time they're interesting and realistic. I also like how you don't describe her boyfriend, we don't find out if he's a jerk or a good guy or not, it comes off better for the guy who's explaining it all (in third person, technically, but y'know XD). And maybe also because the description reminds me of someone I know, haha. But yeah, it's cute. I wouldn't change anything about it ^^ Moon's Poetess |
| Ciiirce 2008-04-04 ch 1, | abuseOh, that's so sad... but really, really good! I loved the writting style, and just the whole concept and idea overall. One of the better oneshots I've read on fanfiction - I loved it! |