interesting...definitely could be elaborated more though, but nice.

hey,

this is pretty good.
also pretty sad for the girl in some ways, thought for now i'm being a sadist i think she did have it coming for her there.

Rafael kinda over killed it with the switching schools thing, but i think he's just outta his mind from the break up.

overall this is a pretty good one shot.

keep it going with your stories!

Mei :)

Good Morning America, Patrica WAKE UP (:
This one shot is AWESOME(:
wait wait i gotta read something(:

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i loved it

its interesting. i like the last line. i think Rafael is a little crazy though. i also thought the whole situations with Kara dating aroung like that with a bf and an ex was a little cliche. i think the characters could've been developed a lot better. i liked the idea for it though. i did think it was good, but reviews are for constructive critisicm... sorry if i hurt your feelings.

SWEM

really intersting take.
i wish it was a full-length story.

[And she was Danica’s best friend.]

For most of the paragraphs, you're describing Danice in Kara's POV, so I'm guessing you meant 'Kara' instead of 'Danica' here?

[“About time you get here, princess.” ]

Got, maybe?

Hm... you could probably start using their names more instead of the pronouns in the explanation of what happened to their relationship, to give us an easier time on who's thoughts we're delving into. I got sort of confused, especially in this part:

[Just like she felt now. Perhaps Danica’s inner gut had predicted the atrocious outcome of the relationship, telling her that it wouldn’t last or that it wasn’t a good idea. Perhaps she should have listened and heeded her best friend’s advice. But when she and Rafael started “dating”, things began to change.]

Who is the 'she' here? Dana or Kara? And who's point of view is this paragraphs for now? I'm thinking... Kara was the one dating Rafael?

[Pushing passed the doors, he walked briskly to the main office.]

Pushing 'past' maybe?

This is a pretty sad oneshot. :( Although yes, I think it was totally unreasonable, and bit of an over-kill for Danica and Rafael to be switching schools just because of Kara's stupid, stpid mistake, I guess it adds drama to the story. I'm not sure who the main character of this oneshot was, perhaps all three of them were, but anyway, despite Kara being all sad and hopeless, I didn't feel any remorse for her at all. Maybe I'm just a sadist, but I think she deserved it. Hahaha :P

Oh well, nice one shot! Keep it up with all your writing!

This is the best one-shot compare to the rest. Thumbs up!