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| ode to melancholy 2008-04-05 ch 1,  | abuseO_o "sadistic tendencies"... "but you learn to conceal yourself from them, / the way you erased all emotion-"; I hope you're not talking about me? *weak laugh* Anyway, this is a very powerful poem. The ** will have to deal with the consequences of their behaviour and treatment. Very nice job, anyway. *adds to favs* |
| xrho 2008-04-05 ch 1, | abuseOh, wow. This is great work. It might sound odd, but what stood out to me most about this poem was the detail. "On cracked windowsill." Brilliant. Truth is in the details, I guess. They put the reader /right there/ in the image. I love the last line, too, "who knew there was destruction in safety?" It's a compelling thought, and definitely more novel than the usual FP fare. Captivating from beginning to end. Kudos. |