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| Caviar to Elephants 2008-04-06 ch 1,   | Wow, I really like it. I like how you show transitions and how things build upon one another. I also like the last sentence "and from the peace cam the light once again" showing that it is some sort of a cycle. I'm sorry you lost. Personally, I think this is really a great piece. Most contest judges don't know squat though. I don't know if this is intentional, but I like the rhythm in it. You have 3 froms then a then and then 3 froms and etc. I liked that a lot too. lol, I suck. Don't know if that makes sense... |
| Poetryfreak173 2008-04-05 ch 1, | By 'Came the light once again', do you mean that the girl came back? I'm sorry, but I can't make much sense out of this... but that's me, not the poem. |