 Narq 2009-10-01 . chapter 1This is very powerful, you talk about doctors abusing their power I guess, and it is true. Some doctors do do that and get away with it.
I like the way you almost tell a story.
Something you could improve on is the formatting. Try having stanzas. If you have shift-enter you get single lines; only enter and you get double lines. Try it!!
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 Thermite 2008-04-12 . chapter 1Hmm...makes one wonder who is the more sick, the doctor or the patient? I suppose people will always feel as though they have the right to decide the fates of others...Great poem; whether you purposefully outlined a major folly in human nature or not, this definitely made me take a moment and reflect on society as a whole. Excellent!
No worries,
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