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english summer rain
2008-07-06
ch 1,
abusehaha sweet. concept is awesome. should it be 'hand in hand' not 'hand and hand'? not so sure about that. line breaks didn't ruin the flow, overall well written. i liked it :D
simpleplan13
2008-04-06
ch 1,
abuseI love the first line... the whole perfect/imperfection thing was a nice play on words. I also like the ending... it basically answer the question readers (well me anyway) were asking themselves when reading the piece.

The only thing is the punctuation just seemed a bit off. I dunno. The second sentence seemed a bit of a runon, plus starting it with overrun just sounded a bit awkward to me. Almost like it's a command as opposed to what youre doing.

Still it's an interesting piece. Nice job!
perpetual questions
2008-04-06
ch 1,
abusei love the vivid surreality. and the idea is so humourous and simultaneously compelling... wonderful.
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