I loved the ending of this, the part about being perfectly sane. One thing, I think "hand and hand" is suposed to be "hand in hand" but I had to read it twice before I saw that, and it doesn't really make a difference. Actually, it kind of adds to it, in a way.
Great job!
Danielle=)

haha sweet. concept is awesome. should it be 'hand in hand' not 'hand and hand'? not so sure about that. line breaks didn't ruin the flow, overall well written. i liked it :D

I love the first line... the whole perfect/imperfection thing was a nice play on words. I also like the ending... it basically answer the question readers (well me anyway) were asking themselves when reading the piece.

The only thing is the punctuation just seemed a bit off. I dunno. The second sentence seemed a bit of a runon, plus starting it with overrun just sounded a bit awkward to me. Almost like it's a command as opposed to what youre doing.

Still it's an interesting piece. Nice job!

i love the vivid surreality. and the idea is so humourous and simultaneously compelling... wonderful.