Reviews for Once Upon an Afternoon

Reviews For: Once Upon an Afternoon

Train Man 2008-04-17 ch 1,	abuseHey really enjoyed the story. Quite fluffy, but very sweet. I am interested to know what reality is..'laced in'. Keep writing and smiling xD
TheArtOfBeingMe 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseOh, this was just fantastic. Absolutely loved it. Love you, come to think of it!
Dot Cubed 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseAw, that was adorable! The sad kind of adorable though, because it's obvious that the girl is still hurting. I like how we don't know their names, though: it makes the characters very mysterious. Anyway, I really liked this and absolutely loved the dynamic between your two characters. I want a guy like that now, haha.
beeyouteefull 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseWonderfuly fluffy! Great job!! I like how you didn't spend forever on descriptions and left stuff for the reader's imagination to fill in! If only i didn't walk to school, maybe something like this would happen to me(i wish). ;p
Korangstababe 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abusegreat story its amazingly true. guys with green eyes are deff the hottest lmao.
abyssgirl 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseaw... it's so adorable! i like it. ^_^ could you review my story? it's called New Beginnings. thanks! ^_^ and good luck with your tests and stuff!
fleur de l'est 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseLoved this! I don't normally read stories (despite the fact that I write lots of them, I can't be bothered to read super-long texts on the screen) but this one had a particularly catchy start so I kept on going. Short paragraphs helped as well. I liked the sarcasm dripping off your tone and bits of slangs; and also the way you let the story tell itself, rather than giving loads of superfluous descriptions. The conversations proved easy to read. I don't know what people would say about the clarity of the text, but personally I like vague outlines with blanks for the reader to fill in, and I think this story is a bit like that. In other words, I don't know what you could improve on. == ~fleur

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