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| Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-06 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting tone here - anger, frustration. Reads almost like a rant (which, from your summary, I believed this is?) Nicely expressed. My favorite lines would have to be 'People are brutal, your audience vicious But you're worst, you're basking in deadly sins', especially the way you refer to gluttony all throughout. |